Wednesday, December 03, 2008

Alice: A writing prompt

Okay, I forgot about this weeks writing prompt, although I did manage to send out the piece, "God's Wife."

The prompt that everybody else chose was this: Alice didn't remember who had given her the key. Well, it's hardly polished, but here's something.


400 words

Alice couldn’t remember who had given her the key. She hoped it was the Klingon. Even under all of his scowling makeup she thought she had seen a twinkle in his eye. But then, it could have been the Vulcan. He had sort of twinkled at her too.

The afterglow party had left her rather confused. A couple dozen from TrekCon2290 had moved from the hotel bar to the hospitality suite. Between sniffing more than too much from the tank of Arcturian atmosphere gas, and smoking a bit of Silurian ceremonial herb, Alice couldn’t remember much.

Holding the key-card to her barely covered green breast she tried to concentrate. She had been among a small crowd in the corner, tightly packed together, whispering gossip and catty comments about the lack of fidelity some of the participants had displayed this year. It takes more than a pair of ears to make a Romulan. And then she felt a warm press on her arm and when she brought up her hand to look a moment later, there was the key, and no one near enough to have obviously put it there.

She thought for a minute that any potential friend for the night should have at least introduced himself before the invitation. But then she realized that as Vina, the Orion slave girl, if she was to be faithful to her role, she was only to respond by obeying. It wasn’t an invitation.

The vine-like armbands of her outfit felt tight. She tugged a bit at the very low cut sheath dress that she had created in her basement. She was not Alice and she was not the clerk at an insurance company who hasn’t had a real date in nine months. She was Vina. She was an animal. She was desired.

Making her way to the fourth floor, she steadied herself on the elevator door frame. She rechecked the key number and moved up the hall and did a quick inventory in her tiny, leaf-shaped purse for breath mints and condoms. Some things are universal.

The key purred and clicked at the door, she took a breath and stepped in. The lights were low. Then from the bed she heard a voice, “Krall nacck tranmat niir.” She thanked God that she had practiced her Klingon vocabulary, smiled a wicked smile and began dancing.


At Wednesday, December 3, 2008 at 9:53:00 PM EST, Blogger k. berry said...

"TrekCon2290". . . he he, I love this premise!

My favorite lines: "She rechecked the key number and moved up the hall and did a quick inventory in her tiny, leaf-shaped purse for breath mints and condoms. Some things are universal."

At Thursday, December 4, 2008 at 10:04:00 AM EST, Blogger Charles Gramlich said...

Sounds like she likes it "Klingon."

At Thursday, December 4, 2008 at 11:38:00 AM EST, Blogger aubreii said...

Once again fantastic Jon! I had no idea that these conventions had the potential to be so exciting. I should have embraced my inner nerd years ago.

At Thursday, December 4, 2008 at 2:51:00 PM EST, Blogger Jon said...

k.b. I think the condoms were probably green too.

Charles: Nothing like a little interspecies action to brighten your weekend?

Aubreii: I've never been to one. If you want to know about cons, ask Stewart...especially about the Furries.

At Saturday, December 6, 2008 at 6:12:00 PM EST, Blogger Stewart Sternberg said...

Good god...flashbacks to conventions. Not that anything like that ever happened to me. Some day we have to sit and discuss conventions...or better yet, you should come with me to one of them.

At Saturday, December 6, 2008 at 7:51:00 PM EST, Blogger Jon said...

Stewart: Can I be the rabid squirrel?

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This just rocks. On so many levels. I really have to shower now. For so many reasons.

At Tuesday, February 3, 2009 at 1:18:00 PM EST, Blogger Avery DeBow said...

The dark side of cons--finally exposed! Seriously, though, I love the protagonist's short, but telling, battle with her inhibitions. The whole thing was very deep for such a tight story.

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